Anna ([info]themoonbar) wrote,
@ 2004-07-17 00:13:00
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Current mood: tired
Entry tags:gilmore girls fanfic

Just some good old fashioned sexy fun. Almost
Apparently, in my world, it never rains but every once in awhile it pours. Technically, it's Saturday, and I'm going to spend all day tomorrow building sets and being sucked into the center of the earth by the sheer weight of the IDs around my neck, so here's my contribution to the L/L ficathon.

This was less hard than I expected, once I accepted the fact that I was going to repeat myself. Apparently King of Practical Wisdom said everything I was going to say about these two.

Title: Get it on the Table
Author: Anna S.
Summary: "She was like a human tornado, leaving destruction and a strange emptiness in her wake"
Rating: R
Notes: Written for [info]fourteenlines's Luke/Lorelai challenge, who also doubled as my human litmus test and titler-extraordinaire.

To my delight and amusement, I got the fabulous [info]nestra who requested secret touching.


“Luke, wake up!”

He heard the words through a sleepy, warm haze, and his only answer was to bury his head deeper into the pillows. Even after Lorelai pulled off his comforter and repeated herself, he refused to budge.

Suddenly, her mouth was on his, and Luke responded without thinking. Lorelai said something, but he smothered her with another kiss, wrapping his arms around her waist, and pulling her on top of him like a blanket.

“I’m up,” he said, grinning.

Through the thin silk of her tanktop he could feel her nipples hardening against his chest. Her brain and her body seemed to be obeying different commands. While her legs were intertwined with his, and her hands were gripping his arms, she was looking at him sternly.

“Luke, if you don’t leave now, Babette will see you and I don’t think she’ll believe that you’re just fixing the roof this time.”

He groaned, but he rolled out from under her and sat up.

“This is ridiculous. I have to sneak over here like some sixteen year old punk kid in the middle of the night, and then be gone by the crack of dawn.”

“We both agreed it was better if we kept this secret for a little while.”

“Yeah, but not for this long. We’re doing great, aren’t we?” He picked his jeans up from the floor and pulled them on, noticing that they’d started to smell like Lorelai’s house.

“Better than great. Perfect.” Before he could argue his point, she continued, “but that’s exactly why we can’t tell anyone. Things would have to change! And it can only get worse, not better. They would be spying on us all the time and making cracks and cackling every time you came over..”

A panicked note had started to come into her voice, so he cut her off. “Okay, fine. But at some point, we’re gonna have to tell them.”

Before he left, she gave him an intoxicating kiss that lingered on his lips the entire way home.


*


Four hours later, she was sitting in his diner. Luke’s estimation of her beauty hadn’t changed after they started sleeping together, but the knowledge that he could run his fingers through her hair, that he could possess her made him feel a little light-headed.

“What do you want?” he asked in the brusquest voice he could manage.

Lorelai gave him a wicked look. He felt himself reddening and could only say, “the regular then.” As he walked past her, she brushed her fingers against his thigh.

Later, as he poured her coffee, she slipped her foot under the cuff of his jeans, running her toe along his bare skin, while giving him bedroom eyes. Luke nearly dropped the cup.

“Storage room. Now,” she muttered.

She stood up first and headed towards the bathroom, cutting off towards the storage room at the last second. Several tables down, Luke saw Miss. Patty eyeing them suspiciously, so he waited as long as he could before following.

When he walked in, Lorelai launched herself at him. Curling her legs around his hips, she kissed his neck and face furiously. Luke hiked her skirt up, so he was holding her bare ass in his palms, and in one quick motion, pushed her back against the wall. She groaned.

“Now,” Lorelai said in a strangled voice.

“Someone could walk in,” he said in an equally strained voice, as she reached for his zipper.

“That’s what makes it fun,” she whispered into his ear, flicking her tongue against his neck.

He went completely still. Lorelai slipped from his hands, leaving her standing in front of him.

“Luke?” she said after a few minutes of silence.

When he spoke, his voice was rough and angry. “That’s what makes this fun for you, isn’t it?” He ticked off ex-boyfriends, “Nick, Albert, Max, Jason. Somehow you always manage to come up with some reason for secrecy. The town can’t know, your parents can’t know, because you’re still rebelling against authority like a High School freshman.”

“That’s not true, Luke and you know it,” she snapped back.

“Okay, prove it. Walk out there and tell everyone that you’re with me.”

Her mouth opened and shut. Luke closed his eyes, warding off a fresh wave of fury.

Lorelai pressed her hand against his chest. When he looked at her, she seemed more contrite.

“It’s not like that, Luke, I swear. Maybe that hasn’t always been true in the past, but this is you and me, not me and Max or me and Jason. And I really, honestly want this to work out.”

Her eyes were brighter than usual and when her lip started to quiver, he couldn’t help softening a little.

“Just give me time,” she said.

After a pause, he nodded. And before she could tempt him into anything else, he returned to the counter. Ignoring Miss. Patty’s questioning look, he calmly wiped down the counter. Lorelai reappeared a few minutes later, looking as fresh as if she’d just taken a shower. She was even louder and bubblier than usual, demanding more coffee from him every few minutes.

“Doesn’t it bother you that you’re killing yourself?” he demanded after her fifth cup.

“Of course, it bothers me. But I can’t stop drinking it. See, I have this theory that everybody has one thing they can’t give up, no matter how dangerous it is. For me, it’s coffee, for Rory, it’s books.”

Lorelai started pointing out the other customers, “Gossip, her cats, bronzer, cigarettes...”

When she reached Taylor, Luke said, “Fascism. And I don’t even want to know what Kirk’s is.”

“Luke,” called out Taylor. “Part of running a successful dining establishment is service. Where are our menus?”

He made a ‘see?’ gesture to Lorelai and grabbed two menus, which he slammed down on Taylor’s table. When he came back to the counter, Lorelai had the expression that usually meant something was going to end up broken.

“What’s yours?”

“My what?”

“Your addiction.”

“I don’t have one,” he said in a very even voice.

“Liar. I guess I’ll just have to figure it out later. I knew Luke Danes had to have at least one dark secret.”

She was completely alive, face animated, eyes glowing, a smile tugging at her lips. “I’ll get it out of you, later,” she mouthed and practically danced out the door. She was like a human tornado, leaving destruction and a strange emptiness in her wake. He wondered for a moment, what happened to the people who tried to hold on to tornadoes.

Luke continued to gaze after her all the way down the street. Even when he went back to work, his mind was hazy around the edges, filled with the memory of her last goodbye.




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[info]krazykitkat
2004-07-16 09:56 pm UTC (link)
AHHHHH!!!
So beautiful.
There must be more fabulous L/L.
Thank you for putting such a smile on my face.

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[info]themoonbar
2004-07-17 10:36 am UTC (link)
Heh. Well, you can go check out the other challenge stories. From what I've seen, they're all wonderful.

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[info]annakin47
2004-07-17 08:47 am UTC (link)
Fabulous, exactly! Sweet, and squee-worthy, and beautiful and achy all at once. I love messy endings like this - they kill me, but I live for them. Thank you for this!

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[info]themoonbar
2004-07-17 10:34 am UTC (link)
Thanks for the lovely words. And messy endings are my reason to live. Seriously. *g*

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[info]yourjezebel
2004-07-17 09:00 am UTC (link)
He wondered for a moment, what happened to the people who tried to hold on to tornadoes.

Beautiful.

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[info]themoonbar
2004-07-17 10:35 am UTC (link)
Thanks. Glad you liked it.

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[info]_jems_
2004-07-17 11:27 am UTC (link)
I can very much imagine that this is how the season will start. Spot-on dialogue. When your Luke says something I actually see Scott Patterson in my mind, and that's a rare thing.

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[info]themoonbar
2004-07-17 01:08 pm UTC (link)
When your Luke says something I actually see Scott Patterson in my mind, and that's a rare thing.

Thanks! Although a lot of that credit goes to SP, who creates a very distinct character with a recognizable voice.

As for next season, I'm just hoping we get a little happiness (and kissing) before it all implodes. Have you heard that they're brining Christopher back?

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[info]_jems_
2004-07-17 01:30 pm UTC (link)
Yes, I heard that, and I can't help but be afraid of what he'll be doing there. I'm hoping that him being there will bring Lorelai to some sort of resolution regarding her feelings for Luke and Christopher. As in: Christopher is the dream I had when I was 16 and it can never work. Luke is the long haul guy.

Because if he's there to break them up I will scream and cry and throw things at my TV.

I'm so sick of shows running hot and cold when it comes to inevitable relationships. Just once I'd like to see the actual relationship part, not just the UST.

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[info]themoonbar
2004-07-17 01:59 pm UTC (link)
Word. The actual relationship is the *interesting* part. Of course, as anyone who's ever tried to write one can tell you, it's also hard to find a good balance between domestic schmoop and troubles. (Many times you end up with the cosmicallydoomed!love of J/A or the tragicallyboring!love of S/V. Meh.)

But if Lorelai leaves Luke for Chris, or Luke walks in on them kissing, I will do serious harm to ASP. We're talking eye-gouging here.

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[info]_jems_
2004-07-17 02:33 pm UTC (link)
But if Lorelai leaves Luke for Chris, or Luke walks in on them kissing
Gah! Now you have me imagining all kinds of horrible scenarios. This is not good for the heart, let me tell you.

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[info]legalblonde2005
2004-07-17 12:50 pm UTC (link)
How did I never connect you with "The King of Practical Wisdom", perhaps my favorite GG story ever? Now I'm feeling both blonde and unworthy. Damn.

Back to this story...love it. You've got Luke and Lorelai down (no surprise), and Lorelai's fear, hestitation, and flirtatiousness are just what I would expect from her. The humor is just right, too, loved Miss Patty and Taylor's fascism. And add me to the list that loves the uncertain ending.

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[info]themoonbar
2004-07-17 01:18 pm UTC (link)
How did I never connect you with "The King of Practical Wisdom", perhaps my favorite GG story ever? Now I'm feeling both blonde and unworthy. Damn.

I can promise that you are neither. And I tend to lie low in that fandom, so there's no reason why you would know. My livejournal is primarily for Alias, FS, and HP.

That's a high honor though. You have me blushing to the tips of my toes. Thanks for the wonderful feedback.

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[info]corngirl_jo
2004-07-17 01:03 pm UTC (link)
I loved the idea of Luke's jeans smelling like Lor's house. What a nice metaphor.

My favorite lines have to be:

She was like a human tornado, leaving destruction and a strange emptiness in her wake. He wondered for a moment, what happened to the people who tried to hold on to tornadoes.

Both a great allegory for Lorelai, for Luke as the man who relentlessly holds on to tornadoes, and their relationship as well.

Not to mention the many smiles the story put on my face!

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[info]themoonbar
2004-07-17 01:20 pm UTC (link)
Heh. I actually added that line at the last second, not sure that it wasn't overly anvilicious, so I'm glad it worked for you.

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[info]wingsofsapphire
2004-07-17 03:23 pm UTC (link)
I never thought of the L/L relationship in that way before - the whole "hiding" possibility. I guess I just blocked it out in my head that they would hide anything, but if they were to hide their relationship, this is how I'd see it playing out, especially with Luke's "this is what makes it fun" speech. Thanks for the enlightenment and enjoyable story. For the record, I too, adored the tornado analogy.

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[info]themoonbar
2004-07-21 07:32 pm UTC (link)
Heh. While I couldn't imagine them being in the open about it, because I'm a big old angst whore. *g* But I'm pleased that this felt more real than just me, needing to make things more complicated.

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Love this
[info]kimmers_81
2004-07-17 07:06 pm UTC (link)
I love this fic, is there more cause it would be good for more.
Love the whole hiding thing
from Kim

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Re: Love this
[info]themoonbar
2004-07-21 07:34 pm UTC (link)
Thanks! Although I'm afraid that there's no more, and that as of now, I'm not planning on writing anything else, although you never know.

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[info]nestra
2004-07-17 08:43 pm UTC (link)
I've barely been online today, as seen by the fact that I've yet to post my story, and connectivity problems are kicking my ass, so I haven't had a chance to read it. But I will. Very soon. Just wanted to let you know.

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[info]danamulder
2004-07-17 11:34 pm UTC (link)
This is a change from the certainty and happy-happy of so many other fics, but I like it. I think Luke's going to have a lot of doubts going in, just because of what he's seen Lorelai do to several other men. Why wouldn't he be at least a little bit suspicious?

It all makes sense, and your Luke is just amazing. He has this reality-crashing-down way about him, and you just know he needs for Lor to love him like he loves her, but he's not sure she ever will. He needs hugs. I'd marry him if he wasn't so hung up on Lorelai. hehe ;)

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[info]themoonbar
2004-07-21 07:38 pm UTC (link)
I think Luke's going to have a lot of doubts going in, just because of what he's seen Lorelai do to several other men.

That's exactly it. There's an (understandable) tendency in fanfic writers to smooth over the relationship once they've gotten over the initial hurdle of actually hooking up, but whether she's with Luke, Lorelai's still going to be Lorelai. And she's always been very good at destroying her relationships.

And wouldn't we all want to marry a Luke. They should sell Luke-copies. *g*

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[info]pathstotread
2004-07-19 06:09 pm UTC (link)
Oh, this was really lovely. Great description of Lorelai and Luke's fascination with her. Just...yeah. Wonderful fic all around.

By the way, I'm also a huge fan of "The King of Practical Wisdom". One of the first GG fics I ever read, and definitely one of my favorites.

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[info]themoonbar
2004-07-21 07:40 pm UTC (link)
Thank you twice over. I don't write GG fanfic very often, but it's always rewarding when I do; you guys give the best feedback.

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[info]mandysbitch
2004-07-20 05:28 am UTC (link)
Ohh... I remember what it was I liked so much about "King of Practical Wisdom": you paint Lorelai as a woman who will always be the way she is, always do what she wants to do in a manner that verges on narcissism - and Luke destined to struggle to keep up with her which he does because that's what he needs to do.

As much as I want Lorelai to be more considerate of others - especially Luke - this story seems somehow more credible than that scenario. I love that you write them this way.



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(Anonymous)
2004-07-20 02:43 pm UTC (link)
Love the addiction thing. Now I want to know what Luke's is!
Super story, not an ounce of pretension or contrive-ness about it. Flowed beautifully, caught character wonderfully well.

Thanks!
--netherfield

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[info]themoonbar
2004-07-21 07:45 pm UTC (link)
Thank you!

As for Luke's addiction, any Java Junkie should know that it's Lorelai. ;)

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[info]themoonbar
2004-07-21 07:43 pm UTC (link)
Heh. I started off writing this from Lorelai's POV and you can guess just how much that did NOT work, for all the reasons you just listed.

I still need haven't read yours yet. (Working sucks. How do you all stand it?) But I'm looking forward to it. ;)

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[info]mandysbitch
2004-07-23 03:57 am UTC (link)
I still need haven't read yours yet

Feh. Read it whenever. It's not like it's going anywhere. Or don't read it at all.

I'll give you the gist of it:

Lorelai: [comes over all metaphor-like] I can't make pancakes! Our relationship is doomed!
Luke: [Also coming over all metaphor-like] You're nuts - but I can help you.
Me: I can't believe I wrote songfic about "Macarthur Park".

The end.

Working sucks. How do you all stand it?

Actually, I really like my job. :)

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[info]themoonbar
2004-07-23 04:06 pm UTC (link)
Dude. Your story's good. I don't know what you're talking about. I love your Lorelai- you remind me why I liked her to begin with, flaws and quirks both.

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[info]mandysbitch
2004-07-23 07:40 pm UTC (link)
I love your Lorelai- you remind me why I liked her to begin with, flaws and quirks both.

Aw - your sweet for finding some time to fit this story into your busy schedule. Thanks.

and I hope you get some time to read more of the L/L ficathon stories. There's some great stuff there.

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[info]musesfool
2004-07-20 08:43 pm UTC (link)
Oh, I love this. It's absolutely true to Lorelai and her approach to relationships, and Luke's approach to Lorelai (she is his addiction, yes? *g*) and it's hot and funny and bittersweet and a little hurty, because you definitely get the idea that Lorelai may screw this one up as well, and there would be no fixing it.

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[info]themoonbar
2004-07-21 07:50 pm UTC (link)
She is, indeed. And I suspect that Lorelai will end up breaking Luke's heart at least one more time, and while it'll be completely in character that won't stop me from throwing large things at my computer screen. *g*

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[info]michellek
2004-07-20 10:45 pm UTC (link)
This is amazing. The characterization, and the little doubts that are really perfect considering Lor's track record. It's a rare thing that L/L fanfic acknowledges all the problems that could be there (outside of the whole idea of breaking the barriers of the friendship). But anyway. Great fic. :)

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[info]themoonbar
2004-07-21 07:48 pm UTC (link)
Yeah, on the one hand, I understand why writers (both fanfic and professional) tend to make a deal out of the getting together and then forget the relationship or destroy it once they're a couple. But in my opinion, figuring out how to re-shape their lives is better dramatic fodder than the endless will-they or won't-they.

Clearly, sweeps does not agree. *g*

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[info]keenai
2004-07-22 07:39 am UTC (link)
That was so good! I loved Luke's denial of an addiction and that Lorelai didn't see that it's her. Typical. Very good, very in character.

I'm trying not to wig about Christopher and his potential for angst too much. Since ASP managed to make the Rory/Dean thing in the finale very natural and not make me fill up with hate, I'm going to believe (and pray) that she manages the same with Chris. Or else, I will be very, very, very angry and GRRRRRR.

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[info]themoonbar
2004-08-10 02:36 pm UTC (link)
Thanks! Sorry for the late reply. My life's been a madhouse recently.

As for the spoilers, my worries have been a little alleviated by ASP's comments recently in which she said that the L/L relationship will play a major role in the upcoming season, Chris or no. And SP promised us that things will heat up.

So, I'm cautiously optimistic.

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[info]keenai
2004-08-12 09:19 am UTC (link)
Cautiously optimistic is good. I'm going to try that. You'd think I'd have learned by now, but I'm kind of really excited about next season. Please don't make me regret it, AS-P.

No worries about the comment. My life is a sea of hectivity (ooh, new blend!) right now.

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[info]spy_barbie
2004-07-23 08:29 am UTC (link)
I loved that!!

She was like a human tornado, leaving destruction and a strange emptiness in her wake. He wondered for a moment, what happened to the people who tried to hold on to tornadoes.

This is the best part! I just wanted him to admit to himself that his addiction was Lorelai. :)

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[info]themoonbar
2004-08-10 02:37 pm UTC (link)
Thanks! And sorry I've taken so long to say that.

And I suspect that Luke sort of knows, but can't quite bring himself to admit it out loud. ;)

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[info]kimarama
2004-07-30 10:32 am UTC (link)
You've written Luke and Lorelai's relationship as I really see it... complex, swirling, and consuming. They push, they pull, and fight, and crash, and... stand back people so you don't get burned by the sparks.

Their flame burns bright here and I'd love to see you write a story that explores Luke's addiction, (which I'm guessing has to do with dark hair, blue eyes, porcelain skin, and tight jeans).

Great story. I totally enjoyed it!

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[info]themoonbar
2004-08-10 02:38 pm UTC (link)
That's a perfect description of their relationship. And I appreciate the kind words, despite how long I've taken to reply. *g*

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(Anonymous)
2004-10-27 05:00 am UTC (link)
That was amazing! Beautiful, and a little depressing. Thanks for writing it.

Hey, is there a way I can read other stuff from the LL challenge?

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Aw, Luke
[info]snooboostoo
2005-01-05 05:10 am UTC (link)
I just stubbled across this one in my livejournal surfing and had to stop and say wow, just love this one!

You are very good at expressing Luke's point of view.

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lalalalalalalalalalalalal
(Anonymous)
2005-10-26 05:29 pm UTC (link)
cute..........................................................

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[info]moireach
2005-12-05 03:48 am UTC (link)
Aw, this manages to be sweet and hot and real all at once -- you have a great handle on Lorelai's patterns and Luke's reactions. Wonderful shot of both of them.

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